OK, I really like it overall, the one thing I might change is, you have that the child searches AFTER he/she dies. I would change the word "searches" to "searching," to me, that makes more sense.
Thanks for that. It was constructive. I had originally written searching. Then, for some reason, I changed it. With your advice, I went ahead and changed it back. Thanks.
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OK, I really like it overall, the one thing I might change is, you have that the child searches AFTER he/she dies. I would change the word "searches" to "searching," to me, that makes more sense.
But very original and creative:)
Thanks for sharing!
Maria
Thanks for that. It was constructive. I had originally written searching. Then, for some reason, I changed it. With your advice, I went ahead and changed it back. Thanks.
Where did you ever conceive such a notion? Did someone else do this before, or is an innovation of your own? I really like the idea.
This poem needs to be sent somewhere to be published; it's genius.
My one question concerns the parenthetical "and all that jazz" -- why reference _Chicago_?
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